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Mountain silence

mountain silence

a flock of wild geese

draws lines

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السكون السائد في الجبل
يرسم سرب الإوز البري الطائر
الخطوط

translated into Arabic by Benjamin Johanna Daniel alantologia 27.03. 2024

summer solstice

the moment I become a lake

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mittsommer
der moment in dem ich ein see werde

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Photo copyright: Isabella Kramer

first snowfall

unexpected silence

in my parent's house

erster schneefall

die unerwartete stille

in meinem elternhaus

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fallen snow
absorbs the railway sounds
Mittagsschlaf

©magyar

bamboo

louder and louder

the silence in me

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the om

of a resting stone

moss grows

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Photo by Daniel Burka on Unsplash

moon shadow

the blue sound

of our silence

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published on Poetry Pea Series 3 Episode 4: Loving 18. Feb. 2020

publishes on Blōō Outlier Journal senryu special 4

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Christmas means

making a song out of silence

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Noel carols
from each hearts silent hope
love is born

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flooding

against the shore

blue hour

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morning fog

the soundless fall

of a leaf

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sunrise

this yellow flower blooms

nights fog

©magyar

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paved with stars

the lonely beach and

your searching fingers

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a quarter moon
filled with the night stars
this sea diver

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snow covered

the absence of tones
freedom and pain

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bamboo

louder and louder

the silence in me

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sleeping crows

under the milky way

nightingale's echo

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"I enjoy the subtlety and epicness of this one. The crows are sleeping, and their various calls cannot be heard any longer, but the nightingale's echo (not song, but echo of it, which is important to note) still resounds. The nightingale exhibits many sounds while singing, like whistles, trills, and gurgles. And this echo of its song is underneath the expanse of the milky way.

Firstly, as a reader, I can say it is simply an exquisite image. But beyond that, we have a continuation of sound in the nightingale--and at night, when dangerous things are supposed to happen. The nightingale's song is loud and immensely beautiful and is a common subject for poetry because of its enamoring song.

Why is it important that it is an echo of the song rather than the song itself? I think because when we look up at the milky way, its distance is clear, but its beauty is still mesmerizing. The same could be said about the echo of a nightingale's song.

The nightingale as a kigo or seasonal reference is for all seasons. Comparing that reference with the seeming eternity of the Milky Way is poignant.

The colors are also important to mention. The milky way could be said to be white and the crows are black. Though we would associate the night with darkness, the bright milky way and the bright song of the nightingale fill it with a brilliant atmosphere. Readers might ask the question, "Is night really night?" And for that matter, "Is anything really as it is?"

I think Isabella used the "o" sound effectively with the ends of line 1 and line 3 being "crows" and "echo." Also notice the use of "l" with "sleeping" "milky" and "nightingale" which makes the haiku more musical.

A succinct but grand haiku by +Isabella Kramer."

by Nicholas Klacsanzky

Painting: Woodblock print by Ohara Koson (1887-1945) of a crow and blossom - created ca. 1910

further publication THE HAIKU FOUNDATION: EARTHRISE 2017
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